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Player Won wrote:

truth....im actually waiting for someone else to post because idk where you guys are going right now. We're going into the depth of your background...and idk how to continue that.

I'm also not very interested in G.O.R.T's story. .....it isn't going far plot-wise.

Well, we're not really going through with that. The last post I made was about revealing my identity; fairly easy for you, Cam. And Aaron bringing some sword to me so that he can break it and bring back my powers (in the story of course).

I just can't come up with a good post to continue it. I was expecting someone else to continue it so that we can enjoy more of it. But that didn't happen.

Pain wrote:

I just can't come up with a good post to continue it. I was expecting someone else to continue it so that we can enjoy more of it. But that didn't happen.

as was i.....

Sorry, G.O.R.T.

One topic is by human perspective and the other is with both transformers and humans. At the moment we are having a problem with Deathfield because we have no idea how to continue it. Maybe Steelclaw can solve that problem since he's supposed to post next anyway.

Yeah, I do have an idea but I am the last post.

well...now im having trouble with both...with the constant changes....G.O.R.T ruining my plans with Mandalore and Hawk constantly throwing new crap and making herself a goddess...idk what to do anymore.

And now a post is expected from me

im no trucking goddess dont start bullshit
i dont mind biting ur fracking head off asshole

I am just playing along, next person says goddess im trucking kill you.

hey, I will give you a push in TF, then you can go from there.

Player Won wrote:

well...now im having trouble with both...with the constant changes....G.O.R.T ruining my plans with Mandalore and Hawk constantly throwing new crap and making herself a goddess...idk what to do anymore.

And now a post is expected from me

For real, man...

Commander Hawk wrote:

im no trucking goddess dont start bullshit
i dont mind biting ur fracking head off asshole

I am just playing along, next person says goddess im trucking kill you.

Please don't start.

eh....let her speak....idc. Her "internet threats" don't phase me. I think i'm done with the stories until we get a new one started....cuz these are getting rediculous.

uh...im up for that...but i dont think it'd be a good idea for just us to have something just we can relate to....i hate star trek....and terminator, but im willing to work past it. Others may not be..

well you already have me backing you...go ahead.

I have an idea....

Why don't we do Quantum like this? We can have G.O.R.T's plot but have people with powers. Maybe have it so that there was a kind of "apocalypse" and ordinary people are dying. The one's that are left have to find a new home and a cure to stop the people with abilities, and they could do that with the space thing.

Cam and a few others said they wanted powers so this could be the way to go. We could have some of the same characters from the actual Quantum story (if the person wants that) and make it so if they choose to be the same person from Quantum then they have to have the same abilities they did in that story.

Or.......

We could do a kind of zombie apocalypse thing.

you whatch alot of apocalypse movies dont you?

No actually, but I just figure they make for one hell of an interesting setting for a story. Think of it like this, the world has practically ended right? There's no military, no police, no laws. A person could get away with anything and show who they really are. It helps to show who the heroes and villains are in a story.

Let's do it. But remember, no overpowerd dudes, no deaths of characters without the creator/poster's permission, and NO ridiculous betrayals that make no sense.

Cool, but seeing though Gen here came up with the plot to begin with then maybe we should let him start off the story?

I'll send you a pm soon.

G.O.R.T wrote:

Player Won wrote:

I think i'm done with the stories until we get a new one started....cuz these are getting rediculous.

I have to agree.

I was planning on joining Deathfield, but by the time was on Page 3 I realized it was Dragonball Z in the Afterlife.

This forum is in need of original content, and I think this thread's idea could be it.

Listen people, no one likes reading RPGs when everyone wants the story to focus around THEIR character.

Here are examples of BAD writing:

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my eyes snapped open as my cyborg half started spiking up...
my shoulders became spiked..my hair became red....

get away from her.....

john....slowly back up...

the one known as john backed up slowly...

my hands on the railings turned into claws...
i hissed as fangs appeared...
i jumped over the railing and landed on the ground...
that killer will die by my hands...NO ONE IS SAFE FROM MY ANGER.

i howled at the black moon as i ran from my position into the dark forests of deathfield..

follow her!

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Fool, Fool!!!You cant even survive without me!

WRONG. i can live perfectly without you.
thats when i grabbed his neck harder my powers consuming his powers, he froze and struggled as his body started loosing his colors and powers.
The Decepticons couldnt do anything for all the Hunters had aimed their cannon, guns, and blades at them, nuclear guns.

Megatrons hands went limp on my neck after a few seconds, as his eyes flashed gray and his hand went limp on the ground.
i stood up and growled as his power consumed me, my blades vanishing appearing a large cannon, my head was shielded by a helmet covering my whole face my eyes become a laser eye, large two horns appeared on my head, my armor became extra bulky as one of my arms turned into a shockwave, my other claws. my legs were slender with extra armor, heels for my feet. 5 Decepticon Hunter marks appeared all over my body.

Pain and the rest were dead shocked to what they have witnessed.

Names DeadlyVenom, and I will destroy this planet.

Here are examples of GOOD writing:

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Hmm, heartless you say? For something like that we say "Querytura", which in our language means "one that fights without a reason." I for one do not believe in extermination, but recent events has forced me to do whatever it take to protect my people. I do not believe in mindless destruction unlike my brethren, but I won't let them be-

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Listen, John. I will die, but out there somewhere someone will take my place. Someone who will be more powerful but maybe unstable, you must beware of my reincarnation. There is a place in the universe where I will be reincarnated, but I will be much more different that how you see me now...that is why I am saying goodbye you...the spirit of the warrior....lies...with...

Why is Pain's better you ask? Because he uses better grammar? NO.

It's better because he doesn't go Super Saiyan three posts in.

Everytime someone starts a new RPG, they should post rules on what players can and cannot do.

BTW, sorry Player Won about the Mandalore thing.

As for a new story, I'm thinking it could start out in a post apocalyptic setting like in Terminator Salvation...



And over time can slowly evolve into a shiny space adventure like Star Trek

This actually makes perfect sense.

One of the golden rules in Play-by-post RPGs is NOT roleplaying another person's character. Furthermore, there indeed has to be a set of house rules (an agreement that all players have about playing one story).

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RPG How-To
6. Having identified your target audience make your pitch.

If you politely message someone most people won't bite your head off. You might get ignored but so what? Nothing ventured nothing gained and you're no further behind than you were before. I emphasize again being polite here is key. You want something from this person so antagonizing them is the least desirable outcome. Plus harassing people will get you in trouble, so both of those possibilities are a bad thing.

I too am interested in the Quantum story. If ever this pushes through, I'll sign up as well.